Tulips
This poem is my first attempt at NaPoWriMo prompt which to write a poem featuring at least three of the five senses
You were tight
Close lipped, almost shy.
Among your peers, standing firm.
Not daring to touch for fear of showing weakness
But the warmth gently encouraged, you began to move, to test, to explore.
Safe? Yes it is safe.
As your fragrance joined the aromas, spring arrived.
They didn't notice the build up of your pressure, the hiss as you came to explode!
All they will see are the fragments of beauty that once was as you finally relax.
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I really like the way this begins Julia.
To me, the first half is strong. After ‘…safe’ it doesn’t, for me, have the same subtleties.
Thanks Isobel. I got spooked having to include 3 senses so I fully agree with you!
Phew. After I had posted the comment, which was meant as constructive criticism, I was a bit concerned that you might take offence. I am glad you didn’t.
Beautiful Jia. I think we will have Some fun! X
Thank you. It’s all down to you!
It’s fab Julia, you should do this more often!
Thank you Gilly. Very honoured from someone who writes so beautifully. I’m going to try to write as often as I can. Need to get dome discipline into my life which has been a bit manic recently!