The Future
This week sees Jenny being quite generous. For our Saturday Centus she has given us an additional 50 words. The prompt is …if I die young… so we have 154 words to write a creative piece. Here’s my effort
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The illness had taken it’s toll. That youthful face with bright eyes had been replaced by a grey pallor and such sadness.
She was trying to be brave and not show her terror that being without him would mean. He had always been her strength, her confidence, her energy. Everything she had achieved was because of him.
Consciousness came and went. He was aware of the situation they were in and knew he had to take the lead.
‘If I die young,’ he said in a feeble but determined voice, knowing that there was no if about it, ‘I want you to live the life we planned. Do you understand?’
She nodded desperately trying to keep breathing as her heart lurched in her chest.
‘It is a life for two people so you must find someone else. That’s if I die young.’
His hand slipped from hers and at last he was at peace.
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Oh.
My.
Just beautiful.
This feels like a remembered moment. It is so believable and poignant.
I loved this.
Oh.
I have tears in my eyes. Beautifully done. laurie
He obviously had a pure and selfless love for her, and she for him. What a touching story!
I’d like to think you were right about their love. Thank you for stopping by!
So sad and so very touching! A beautiful story that not only tugs at your heart-strings but drags them down the street! Wonderful, evocative piece!
Many thanks Tom. It was one of those prompts I think!
What a beautiful text about a beautiful death. It reminds me of my parents. My father was dying and my mother held his hand the hold time until he left her. The last hour he could not speak because he had difficulty breathing. But one of the last things he said to her was for her to be happy. Yes. He wanted her to continue living and lead a happy life in the time she had left.
Great text!
Best wishes,
Anna
Anna’s SC Wk 68 ‘If I die young’
Thank you for your wonderful reply Anna. I do hope she did.
Sad, but with a sweetness, too.
=)
I don’t like to leave complete despair. Many thanks for visiting!
oh this was so sad, yet so wonderful …
Thank you!
Outstanding Job !
To die with your beloved at your side and him wishing for your continued happiness after he is gone is a rare and precious love to treasure forever !!!
Let’s hope that sort of love increases eh! Great to see you here!
What a sad and sweet post, I feel so bad for her.
It must be hard when this happens in real life mustn’t it? Thanks for stopping by!
Beautiful. And sadly, happening day after day. I was truly touched by your words.
Thank you Donna. It just came out once I got started.
That’s true love. This was very powerful, very touching.
xoRobyn
Many thanks for your kind words and for stopping by!
Oh boo hoo, I knew this centus was going to bring sadness and tears….nicely written but so sorry it came to such a sad ending. BUT! It’s just make-believe so hooray!
Thank goodness! It was difficult to start I think. Thank you for visiting!
Sad but, beautiful in that sadness. A friend once swore to me that love shouldn’t ever hurt us. I always replied: “Of course love hurts us, we cannot know love without pain, it’s all a part of the same circle.” She was adamant it didn’t ever ought to hurt and I’d say “No matter how many years of happiness you share, one day the person you love, or, maybe you yourself will get sick and die, and then the person left is going to be left hurting, so yes, love hurts, it cannot Not hurt at some point in time.’ She never ‘got’ it.
Your prose is deep, heartfelt.
Let’s hope your friend never has to find out that she may be mistaken. Thank you so much for your contribution & I do hope you’ll visit again!
great post Sad and very touching Well done
Thank you. I found it difficult to start but then it flowed. Great to see you here!
WOW!
THis took my breathe away. I felt like I was her.
As he slipped away a tear trickled down.
Blessings
Thank you so much for those kind words. I’m glad it touched you!